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From:
Linda Schubert
Date:
05/29/2016
Loved this. I was looking for your Children's Night story as I wanted to reread it and found that File 40 site has shut down. Is this story posted anywhere else? It would be a shame to lose it.

From:
alynwa
Date:
10/19/2014
I enjoyed this, but I need more. I know it's been awhile, but maybe a little more?

From:
Pippa
Date:
01/29/2013
Great story. I loved the back and forth and the unresolved nature of it. It does though rather cry out for the next installment.

From:
Kiwi Bird
Date:
10/03/2010
Aack! I'm so torn!! *anguished* I absolutely adored the first half of this, but the second half had issues. Napoleon trying, and failing spectacularly, to help Illya celebrate his birthday was really endearing and funny and sweet and so terribly in character. I even liked Katya, which surprised me a bit. When it switched over to Napoleon's birthday, I enjoyed the ridiculous bet and the coconut tree and the swimming and even Illya's sweet and clumsy offer of his heart as a birthday present. But then things started to swerve a bit, and it seemed like you were struggling to drag the story in the direction you wanted it to go. I think it might have stemmed from Illya's offer. Napoleon was right. It was a bit too abrupt. You might still have been able to make it work, though, if Napoleon had brushed it off, and then something else had happened (a mission, something) that forced Napoleon to see Illya in a different light, causing him to decide that Illya was right, that they'd both outgrown meaningless sex.

*sigh* As it was, the story left me feeling unhappy for both boys, Napoleon because he felt that he was backed into a corner by expectations he didn't feel he could meet and Illya because he'd committed himself to someone who cared about him but couldn't give him what he wanted.

Please forgive me for my presumptuous rambling. I really did love the first part, and the second part was still good (it just seemed to falter a bit). I'm really glad you shared this story. Thank you.

From:
c
Date:
04/06/2009
i may have to reread this story to get it's whole affect, but right now, i'm comparing it to a rubik's cube. i'm given the situation (cube), i solve one side, then while trying to solve another, mess up the first, yet in the end, it's all solved, so i'm confused on how i got there. half the time, i wanted to strangle them, now, i just don't know! i'm going to go and reread this now...v-v'

From:
emma
Date:
02/10/2006
Gorgeous story. Hot and achingly beautiful, but not every mushy. I laughed at many places, like this:

"They're your present. I'll just read the paper. I won't watch."

Thank you for sharing the story!

emma

From:
Blondie
Date:
02/10/2006
This was fabulous!! It's a long time since I've had such an entertaining read. I was cheering Illya on all the way. If I haven't told you before, I'll say it now - you're one of my favourite writers.

Keep the faith.

From:
YumYum
Date:
02/09/2006
Loved this story, the back and forth as the two tried to come to terms. I do want details on what happened in Florida...and perhaps a sequel?


From:
Di
Date:
02/09/2006
You already know how much I love this story, but I just thought I'd remind you :)

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